My First Argumentative Essay ♥

sebenernya gue mau nge-posting ini udah rada lama, tp berhubung gue kemaren-kemaren blm sempet jadilah ga ke-posting2 -_-

tadi gue abis final test karena pulang lebih awal pas di motor gue kepikiran sama hal ini jadi ya sudah, sesampainya di rumah buru2 nyalain laptop, mumpung ada waktu senggang :p *sok sibuk* hahah

ini adalah argumentative essay pertama gue, yang diajarin sama guru favorit gue yaituuuu.. Ma'am Lili, beliau adalah guru senior, beliau orang yang sangat baik, meski tegas dan kalo ngomong rada nyelekit, tp dari beliau, gue dapet banyaaaaak banget pengetahuan dan compliments (ʃ⌣ƪ) dan untuk pertama kalinya gue ujian dapet nilai yang sangat tak terduga memuaskannya hahhah anyway, udah lama ga ketemu sama beliau. pinginnya si diajarin lagi sama Ma'am Lili :(

okaaaaay, here we go.. i wanna share my first essay, well i got heaps of mistakes in this case. but it's okay... hahha kalo bener semua mah ga usah belajar lagi :p

kata Ma'am Lili udh cukup bagus untuk permulaan dan sudah terstruktur :)

check this out guys.. enjoy it and i hope it can help you ;)

KIDS ARE THE VICTIMS

Slum area is an area with big population in a city where is poor people live there. Slum area caused by too much urbanization. Kids are the victims from (of) urbanization. Health care, education, and domestic violence are the most problems which happen to the kids who are living in slum areas.

Health care is one of the big (biggest) problem for kids in slum area. There are many kids who are living in slum area (are) infected (by) diseases, such as pneumonia, skin disease, malnutrition, measles, tuberculosis, and diarrhea. Unavailability (of enough) clean water enough, there is no (not) enough good food, pollution, and dirty environments or slums are the reasons for the horrible health care in slum area. In 2009, a survey in Bangladesh showed that under-five mortality rate in slum area is (was) 79% and in isolated area is (was) 44%.

Most of kids who are living in slum area do not (get) proper the education. Their parents cannot afford to pay school fees. Parents assume that education is unimportant thing for their kids; they need money to survive, do not education. To get money only for their meal, they should work very hard; and sometimes they do not get enough money. Although the government has been providing free education, there is always extra charge for buy (buying) uniform, stationery, and et cereta (etc). Parents think if (that) their kids can get money without education, (for) example, their kids can be a beggar(s), street musician(s), or scavenger(s). In slum area, there is (are) only 18% kids who are going to high school. It’s so sad how people can throw education, whereas education in (is) the (an) important key to get success.

The hardest problem for kids in slum area is domestic violence. Kids would be a target to throw parents anger. When parents are being depression (depressed) and getting mad, the best victim on their mind are their children. Kids cannot do much thing (many things) except accept that (accepting).

In summary, kids who are living in slum area are unfortunately kids. They have many problems and they should do everything to survive. Moreover be a (Therefore they should be) stonger in this harsh world.